Well the first 4 panels are good, got a typo in "a lot" though, and i might have bubba listing names of underwear like he did shrimp. The only thing I might change if it was me is maybe have the top gun pilots take them to the beach instead of helicopters, just to tie in the iceman volleyball thing a bit more. Don't get me wrong it's genius bro, is only how I would do it not saying it will do better my way...