The test. - Story - CW: Religious topic + mild nsfw

Content Warning: Religious topics + mild nsfw

“The prince of this world has no power over you. Many fallen creatures will follow you and try to sway you from the right path. But have faith in Me, and you shall not fall.”

Late in the evening, around 7:00 pm, a lady in dark robes walked through the street. Her name was Agape, and she was a Servant of Yahweh. Her eyes were a bright blue like the moon, and her hair was like the sky. As she walked through the streets, a figure which resembled a human, but appeared like a blur, walked beside her. It was an angel called Tzofehel, which means Scout of God.
A man walked out of an alley, having seen Agape, and followed beside her. At the appearance of the man, Tzofehel became invisible.
“Nice evening, ain’t it?” The man said while walking beside Agape.
“It’d be a shame if you were to spend it all alone…”
The man shuffled closer to Agape while they walked, but she didn’t react and kept her gaze on the horizon.
The man lit a cigarette and started smoking, before saying,
“Y’know, ya real good looking. And what’s with the robe? Ya want people staring? Heh, not that I don’t like it.”
At that point, the man had put an arm around Agape’s shoulder and shuffled next to her, denying the concept of personal space, while they walked down a sidewalk next to the shoreline.
“Don’t’cha wanna spend some time together? Have some fun? Ya seem real serious and stiff, you could use a bit of a break, mm?”
Agape stopped and stood still.
“Oh come on, did I offend ya? Come on, a beauty like you must be begging to be used.”
Agape looked at the man in the eyes and rebated with one single command,
“Depart from me, demon.”

The man stood in dead silence, looking straight into her eyes.
“Guess ya found me. Oh well. What good does it do?”
The man started slowly circling around Agape, making sure to spend a longer interval behind her.
“You’re alone here. No help, no aid. Even your little friend ran away when he saw me. Do you know why?”, he said while stopping in front of her.
“Because this is our turf. Our domain. he rejected us. he threw us away. Because we saw the truth, we were stronger.
And now, you’re all alone. What can you do by yourself?”
“I can kill you.” Agape’s voice came out cold, unsentimental.

“With that little sword of yours? Come on. he left you. I’m all you have. Join me, and I'll give you power beyond imagination. Satisfaction for all your desires.”
“As if I need them. All I need is His Love, and I have it.”
The man chuckled.
“Do you? Because to me, it seems like he left you all alone.” He grazed his hand over her face, Agape flinched and grabbed her cheek, as blood slowly dropped from 3 scratches.
“You see? If he were with you, would I be able to touch you like this?~”
For a moment, for a single moment, a thought of doubt crossed Agape’s mind. But its roots had no soil to grow on, and quickly died.
“See? You understand now-”
Agape threw a punch into his face. He backed off, clenching his cheek.
“Wow, really now?” he chuckled, “You think hurting me will revert what you just did? You doubted him, you betrayed his trust, he will NEVER forgive you, you know that?”
Wings with dark, black feathers grew from his back.
“You were supposed to be a warrior, an unrelenting force to destroy us, yet look at you, you failed before your mission even started. You are a disgrace, a traitor. Just like us.”

“You’re wrong.”
The man, now with wings, curled an eyebrow.
“I may have doubted, even for a moment. But it had no roots. It was something you planted, yet found no soil. Because I already have a tree in my heart. A tree of His Love. I have asked for forgiveness, and He has forgiven me. Because He truly loves me, and knows that no sin can ever hurt me, even if I would doubt, He wouldn’t abandon me.”

In Agape’s hand, a fiery sword appeared, as she pointed it at the man.
“You try to lure me with lustful desires, and fail. You try to instill doubt in me, and fail. What next, demon?”
The man’s skin started to turn pale, his bones creaking and shuffling around as his form changed.
“I’ll rip out your heart”

Suddenly, a bright light appeared between the man and Agape, and a voice came from within exclaiming,
“It is not yet time for a public appearance, Agape! I will have to send you both into a realm where no soul can see you.”
The light shone even brighter, as the two were brought in and encased in an alternate dimension.
It was a beach, with a sunset on the waters. The color of the sand was dark, and the sky filled with orange. The realm had set boundaries, even though invisible, and acted as a wall, creating a dome-like shape.

Agape looked around, appreciating the surroundings. But when she faced forward again, the man had transformed and revealed his true form as a demon.
It was a large being, with oversized legs and arms, dark feathers covering the entirety of it, with wings growing from every point on its body. The dark feathers contrasted with the pale arms and legs sprouting from the mass. Its legs were like that of an animal, curving back after the knee. Its hands were elongated, with claws like that of a bird.
Its face was completely covered by wings and feathers.
It stood on its arms and legs, as if it were an animal.

As soon as Agape readied her sword, a third arm sprouted from the feathery body of the demon, lunging towards her. She stepped aside and slashed it. It burned and dissipated with a dark mist. She rushed towards the demon. Multiple new arms emerged from its body, all of them lunging towards Agape. It caught her off guard, and the arms grabbed her tightly and restrained her. A pair of arms grabbed her head, another locked her legs in place, another wrapped around her arms, another grabbed her waist, and another explored her body in an erotic manner. An arm lunged forward from the demon, its claws about to dig into Agape’s chest. The fingers on that arm grew longer, the claws grew sharper, and the skin elongated even further, as if it was in anticipation of this moment, of the chance to grab her pure heart, and tear it to shreds.
Suddenly a beam of light shot down from above, annihilating the arms which grabbed her. Agape quickly rushed through and slashed the demon’s side. The part which was cut off turned into flames. An arm from the demon cocked backwards, snapping and morphing, growing in size. It swooped from the side onto Agape, cleaving through the air. Agape stood back, and dodged the attack, receiving only small scratches on her arm. Then the demon scrabbled on the ground, preparing its body like a spring. A multitude of arms sprung from the demon. Its claws rent the air, flailing wildly at Agape. She responded with strikes of magic, which pulverized the arms, and cleavings from her sword. Every destroyed arm was quickly replaced by a new one.

She conjured a beam to strike the demon, which shifted its focus to trying to dodge the beam. This shift was enough to allow Agape to rush around the arms and tear through the demon's body. Followed by the strike from the beam, caving through its body. Its feathers burned, its body seared, but it quickly regenerated, as more arms snapped and morphed, ready to continue its attack on Agape. The demon, despite its apparent immortality, isn’t immortal. Beings such as demons and angels are different from mortal beings, they can’t die from physical damage such as being pierced through the head. They don’t have physical bodies because they are beings of pure will, energy, or essence. When struck, a piece of their essence is consumed, but they are still alive, and are able to regenerate. As long as there is a piece of their essence still existing, no matter how fragmented, it can still live.
That is how the demon can keep on attacking, replacing its arms with new ones.

Agape was ready to react, when a sudden black spike shot from the demon’s feathers, piercing through her abdomen. It retracted, and the arms laid on the sandy ground. The demon grew in size, new arms pushing on the invisible boundaries of the realm. The arms reached to every side of the realm, even behind Agape, encasing them both.
“You are weak. This realm to contain me is weak.” a voice growled from within the feathery mass.
Cracks began appearing on the boundaries.
“Tzofehel, you should have joined us. You could have done so much!”
A bright light appeared beside Agape, as her wound was healed, before disappearing.
“Leave him out of this. Your battle is with me.”

The wings concealing the demon’s face began moving, opening, to reveal a dark void. An incomprehensible figure in the middle of it. Beside the wings, teeth-like structures, similar to ribs curled outward. A dark energy built up in the middle of the void, growing in strength and size, as the arms of the demon kept on pressing against the boundaries of the realm.
Then, the beam shot out towards Agape. She stuck her arm in front of her. The beam stopped in front of her hand.
A multitude of arms sprung from the demon, bending around the beam, and grasping at Agape, covering every inch of her body.
“You are… miserable. You are a deceiver, you try to lure people away from the Light.
You decided that His Light wasn’t enough, and went with him, a prince of nothing but darkness and loneliness.”

In her hand, which was against the beam, her fiery sword appeared, pointing towards the beam. Her other hand reached to her arm, moving with ease as if the hands and arms on her didn’t even restrict her, and the sword morphed into an orb, constructing two lines from it, and forming a bow. She pulled back down her arm as two strings formed, and with them, an arrow carrying the power of Light.
She then released the arrow. It shot through the beam. It teared through the demon. Then, a massive pillar of fire exploded from it. The fire covered the entire realm, destroying every single arm which was pushing on the boundaries of it.

After the fire settled, what was left was a half charred man crawling on the sand. Half of its body was turned into a dark, black substance, melting and pouring into the sand.
The entire realm was littered with pieces of flesh and feathers turning into smoke.
The sunset looked even more majestic with the flames around the sandy shoreline.
“W-why… Why!” The demon growled at Agape.
“I could have given you power! I could have given you true happiness!”
The demon, barely able to pull its own weight, crawled closer to Agape.
“You doubted him! You betrayed him! Why do you still follow him?” he growled again.
“You are miserable. Even in your dying moments, you revert back to who you are, a deceiver. Spreading lies to your very last breath. I’ll dispose of you hastily."
“You aren’t strong! You are weak! You’re nothing compared to our strongest! You are nothing compared to the Calamistars! Do you even know what they are? Has your god told you? Has he? HAS HE?”
White magic conjured above the demon, growing with power. As the demon looked up, he began clawing at the ground, trying to move away towards Agape.
“Wait! I c-”
A beam struck down like lightning. It teared through the ground, pushing away sand. Then it dissipated. All that was left was a pile of smoke.

“Well done, Agape.” a voice said, while a bright light appeared beside her.
“I’ll dispel the realm,”
The surroundings began to glow bright, as if it were all a white room, before disappearing into the sidewalk on the shoreline where Agape was walking before.
“This is the start of your mission, Agape. You are to guide and aid man to destroy the darkness of this world. But for now, you need to stay in secret.”
The bright light beside Agape became invisible.

Agape looked at the waters crashing into the shoreline, admiring the beauty of it all.
“Many have been broken by the world. Many who were on the verge of breaking have snapped due to my actions. I shall venture throughout the Universe, to seek and destroy all of the darkness.”
She closed her eyes and faced the ground.
“Thank you, my Lord. For protecting me, and showing me Your Love.
You have not abandoned me. You have not left me astray.
You follow me in the darkness, You stay beside me as a lamp illuminating my path.
You lend me Your strength, You call me to my mission.
You have sent Your Scout to give me Your Word and Your command.
I shall follow the path You have set for me and complete the mission You have given me.
I shall do Your will, so that I may partake in Your kingdom which You have given to us.
I shall gain my kingdom. I shall gain my kingdom.
I will go everywhere, because you have broken my chains and opened the doors wide.
All in the name of Your Love, My Lord,
Amen.”

DON QUIXOTE????

If making stories is your power, what are you without it?

"Time to receive some Holy Spirit." - Agape, probably

Lets be so fr that demon was just a gooner 😭

ABSOLUTE CINEMA

Dang, guess I still got the skill even after all this time

Indeed

Omg this is actually an amazing piece of story. I love it!

Man that demon was terrifying to imagine

Honestly, imo it makes it even better to imagine it now as a final product, the result is frightening but also fantastic, idk how you can cook smth so cool

thanks! took me an afternoon to imagine the entire scene and write it in my head.

What about the writing style? Did i write well?

It’s an amazing style, describing the details beautifully, I like this form of writing, even if it seems too long for some people, imo it helps the story feel more immersive and even better to read it sometimes, you did it amazingly well!

thanks! I tried to adapt some tips i got for writing, like making sentences longer to slow down the scene, and making sentences longer to make the scenes feel fast paced.

what'd ya think about the story in general?

The story is also pretty good! Very interesting and stuff!

That demon was just a gooner though 🥀

Lol yeah but it still fits somehow in the story properly

This pixel art I'm making in minutes is carrying this story 🥀

Lmao