warning: this is basically a full length story, sorry if it's not the best

It’s great, Im still not used to your “My OC is overpowered deal with it” stuff but I think it’s sorta appropriate for this story, I like it

How does that apply here?

It doesn’t follow the usual story but either I missed smth or it’s a huge plot hole the fact that X made an OP empty vessel and then forgor about it later
But I mean X isnt that strong anyway so I think it maybe fits here idk

X created the Metal Sonic vessel and left in all the broken abilities like Biodata Copying because he figured nobody would ever be able to actually figure it out

But why make it in the first place if it isn’t for him?

True tho

Part 1: E-X-POSITON

Two things I wanna say. Firstly, this is a Sonic.EXE thing. Secondly, this is specifically an AU to the story of 2011x. If you don't know who that is, 2011x is basically just a retake on the original creepypasta with much higher quality, and he is basically the most iconic EXE you will see. Go read up on his lore if you don't know about him and actually care enough to understand this. If you don't, you're gonna be confused. And if you don't care, why are you still reading?

The story begins with 2011x, years after taking his first few souls. The souls trapped in his realm, after years of torment and constant death, have become used to the cycle of torture. X becomes frustrated by this, and misses the thrill he felt back when the souls were still new to his realm. X decides that the best way to fix his yearning, is to find new souls to play with.

David is a 19 year old boy, who is a fun-loving guy, a faithful Christian, and a fan of Sonic the Hedgehog. David lives with his girlfriend, Elizabeth, a 20 year old girl who strives to be generous and helpful to anyone who needs it. She is also Christian, and fun-loving, although not really into Sonic like her partner is.

When David was young, he was extremely problematic and would get into physical altercations with other kids often. This was mostly in part to his father being an aggressive alcoholic before he was arrested for killing a man in a bar fight. David's behavior continued like this until late in his middle school years, when he met Elizabeth. At first, he mostly just thought she was pretty, but fell in love with her character too. After a few years of having a crush, he eventually got her to go on a date with him. David tried to hook up with her, but she declined due to her beliefs. David was surprised, but respected it. Later, he became curious in said belief when she invited him to go to church with her. He accepted, and found that the message connected to him deeply, and he became a follower of Christ that day. They became lovers, and their relationship persists to this day.

Part 2: One Fateful Day...

After an especially lengthy and exhausting week, David was heading home late on a Friday from his job as a construction worker. After the tiring week, he decided to treat himself and grabbed some food from his favorite food chain, and a movie Elizabeth had been wanting to watch. He headed home with a smile on his face, looking forward to a relaxing and enjoyable weekend.

He opened the apartment door with a smile. The warmth from inside felt comforting after working out in the frosty winter air all day. He walked inside, and greeted Elizabeth with a hug from behind and a kiss on top the back of her head. She smiled and greeted him without turning. She noticed the bags in his hands and got excited. She had always been a foodie and she had been talking about the movie for weeks. They curled up together on the couch with their food on their laps and the movie on the TV. This was exactly what David wanted, and in the moment, everything felt perfect.

Very late that night, David and Elizabeth lied in bed, holding onto eachother. The warm embrace was the last thing David felt as the world faded around him, and his senses became fuzzy as he drifted into sleep...

Part 3: Your New Home

David drifted into consciousness once again after a long sleep, but he couldn't feel anything. No solid surface he could feel, just a cold sensation all over, and when his eyes opened, he saw nothing. He was standing in light, but it did not shine far. He reached out to the darkness, but was stopped by something he couldn't see.

David felt off. His mind felt fuzzy and his body felt different. He realized that he had to be experiencing some strange dream. He figured it was because of the stress he put on himself the day before. David rubbed his face to try and wake himself from the dream, but when he touched his face, it felt wrong. It was large, smooth, and had a point. His hands were smaller than his eyes and he couldn't blink. His hands moved down and he looked at them. Cold silver and blue limbs with four sharp fingers. This wasn't his body. And he knew exactly who it belonged to.

David, still believing he was dreaming, tried to ignore it. He figured it was something from his real life blending with the creations of his mind as it constructed the world around him. He wanted to see what was different with his new body while he had it, and decided to try something. He reached out, and felt the barrier again. A thick glass. He pulled his hand back, and threw it forward again. The glass fractured into a thousand pieces, and he fell down to the ground as the liquid suspending him drained out of the tube he was inside.

Part 4: Blind to the Truth

David stepped out of what once was a capsule, and into the abyss before him. As he moved away from the light, the world seemed to adjust around him, his body heightening it's own perception, turning the world from a black void into something comprehensible.

Many blank computer screens, large test tubes, and pieces of testing equipment were scattered throughout the room. This was evidently some kind of laboratory.

David walked through the now barely-visible environment, scanning his surroundings. He thought he saw silhouettes appear in the corner of his new, mechanical eyes. He shrugged it off, but couldn't help but feel like he was being watched.

As he traversed the different rooms, he found mostly the same kind of thing, but here and there, he found something that stuck out. Some were simple things, like lights that flickered on occasionally. Others were slightly disturbing, like dissected critters that had been left to rot, and strange puddles of something black. Notably, however, there were dimly lit exit signs every couple rooms. David decided to follow these signs.

David encountered some obstacles, like fallen-apart machines blocking the path, but tore through them with his new body. David had always liked Metal Sonic, being intrigued by the cool and dark rival to his childhood hero. He had a Sega CD that his dad gave him as a gift before his father turned into the man that he was. It belonged to his dad when he was a kid. David wondered about his dad as a child. Back when he was innocent, and nothing like the vile man he would become. David wondered how such a transformation could occur in a person's heart, but then again, even Lucifer was once an angel.

Part 5: Beauty Is In the Eye of the Beholder

Eventually, the signs lead David to find a large reinforced steel gateway, secured by an equally strong and complex mechanical lock. As powerful as the door was, David was stronger. With a mighty heave, the door came down and David had finally escaped the laboratory. He was on top a cliff, staring off into a valley below. It was hard to make out the details from his height, but for David, it was quite stunning from his view.

David decided to explore the valley, and, testing his body some more, flew off into the thick forests that lied in the valley.

After landing, David took a second to gather himself again. He stood and looked around, expecting to see the beauty he saw from the top of the mountain. What he saw instead, shook him a bit. The trees were... alive. They had eyes, branches made of exposed flesh and bone, and mouths that gnawed at the world around them. The river that ran next to him flowed with thick crimson, whispers of the unknown were masked - but not silenced - by the gushing of the river.

David stood, and while he knew he should be afraid of the abominations he stood among, he just wasn't. His body did not shake, and he felt no primal urge to run or hide. But he knew why. He was not flesh, he was machine. He had no reason to feel fear, because it was not something his vessel was meant to do. But that worried him. Why did he know that? How could a dream be that complicated? Was this a dream?

David shaked off the thoughts, they served him no purpose but to delude himself. He kept his guard up as he began to traverse the forest of flesh.

Part 6: Love Blinds Us All

David flew through the forest, his velocity shaking the withered grass and fleshy trees as he blew past. He accidentally crashed through a few trees, but his momentum did not falter.

While he was blasting through, David heard a voice call out for help, and he screeched to a halt. He scanned the area, but saw nothing. David called out. The voice cried out another plea for help, David quickly located the direction the cries were coming from and followed the sound to discover someone familiar. A character he knew, with a voice he recognized.

He saw someone with the body of the girl, Amy. But the way she spoke reminded him all too much of Elizabeth. However, there was a bigger concern at hand, as the girl had her leg stuck in the maw of a flesh tree. She was unable to move, and the girls hammer lied too far away for her to reach.

David jumped in a blew the tree apart, soaking the grass in blood and flesh. The girl cowered at the sight of David for a second, but let her guard down afterwards. David helped her up and introduced himself to the girl. The girl immediately recognized his voice and demeanor, and revealed that she was in fact Elizabeth as David suspected. He rejoiced at finding and saving her, but then it set in. If Elizabeth was with him, this couldn't be a dream. The realization set in on Elizabeth as well. They suddenly both became very worried, and tried to discuss a way out.

During their discussion however, Elizabeth had a realization. She explained that she was being chased down by a blue creature, that was why she had gotten scared when David showed up so suddenly. She warned him that if this wasn't a dream, then they would have to be careful. Suddenly, she was cut off.

"FOUND YOU."

An arm shot through Elizabeth's chest and threw her to the ground with enough force to crush her skull on the earth.

Part 7: Blinded By Rage

David stood in shock. For a second the world stopped moving. Despite his superhuman processing speed, he could not understand what had just happened.

He jumped forward, onto his knees in front of the mutilated vessel of Elizabeth. David lied to himself. This was still just a dream. It had to be just a dream. He begged for it to be a dream. He hit himself. He felt no pain, but he did not wake. This was not a dream. He had failed to protect the one he loved.

The grief ran through David's systems, and he could not bear the harsh reality of things. The entity stood above David, mocking him for his weakness. It laughed at his pain, calling him futile and pathetic, and boasting of his godly nature. David's guilt weighed him down, but the mockery reminded him to get back up. His grief was great, but his newly born hatred was far greater. David stood back up.

David turned to the entity. It expected to see fear and sadness on David's face. All he saw was the cold glare the machine naturally had. It expected a feeble attempt to escape, for David to cling to his own life. Instead, it got retaliation, and the only thought of life in David's mind was taking it from the thing before him. David lunged forward at speed faster than he could even think, and struck down the monster with the most powerful strike he could.

The entity was flung back, into the ground. It had never thought something could make him feel pain like that. It was supposed to be a god, and it could not take such a disrespectful action from a mortal.

"Who the hell do you think you are, striking GOD?"

"I don't give a f**k who you deluded yourself into thinking you are. I'm going to tear this whole damn place down, and you're gonna go down with it."

David and the entity lunged at eachother and clashed, both fueled by their anger. David put up the very best fight he could, but this otherworldly being was more powerful than him or his vessel, and threw him to the ground, pulled off his metal limbs, and crushed his mechanical skull. David had the hatred, but lacked the power he needed to win this battle. So, in his last few moments of his systems functioning, he decided that he would find some way to take it.

Part 8: Open Your Eyes

David expected it all to end. He had hoped that, at the very least, his efforts would be rewarded with peace in the next world. Instead, he woke up again, back where he started. There was no moment of rest or peace. He was in another testing unit, in an identical body. He broke out once again. He stepped out, as his body once more adapted to the dark world around him.

David looked around and realized he was in the same place as before, but he came from a different tube. He looked to his left and found the remnants original tube he came out of, plastered on the ground. He saw the corridor of testing tubes he was in and his curiosity was piqued. He got up close and peered into a tube. He thought he saw a reflection. He was half right. It was a replica of his vessel, lifelessly floating in the tube. He checked more tubes. They all contained the same thing; More empty bodies, waiting for activation.

While looking at one of the cold and lifeless machines, the eyes malfunctioned and flickered on for a split second. David jumped back in a defensive pose for a second. The crimson glare made him remember what he had just witnessed minutes ago. His failure. His hatred. His mind was filled with the primal desire of revenge. His body was metal, but his hatred was a quality of his no machine could replicate. As hot as his heart burned, however, it could not make him stronger, so, he would find another way to do so.

David traversed throughout the laboratory once more, following the path he had taken before, but instead of heading outside, he kept exploring. He kept moving, looking for something, anything that could help him. And eventually, he found it. Or a piece of it, rather.

The dim glow of a computer screen shined in the void-like darkness of a large room. David stood in front of its glow as it illuminated his metal head. A large keyboard laid before him, and his hands rested on it. The computer scanned him for facial recognition. David's vessel was recognized by the computer, and he was granted access. He looked through the computers files. After some searching, he found a folder labeled "REPLICATION_PROJECT" that intrigued him. He opened the folder and found many things: lengthy text documents, highly detailed blueprints of his vessel, and most interestingly, something from a man named Paul. A short message from him, detailing his entrapment in this world, and information about something named X. So that was that things name...

Part 9: Can You See It Now?

David continued to look through the files, looking for anything that could help him. He went through message logs, dozens of documents, and more things of that nature, and yet his search was fruitless. That was, until David returned to the project folder again. He found something that he had glanced over before.

A document, labeled "Function_Library". Upon further review, the document contained crucial information about his vessel: Its true capabilities. It gave simple run-downs of all the different abilities that were built into his body. The basic and simple abilities he already knew were the first listed, under the "Primary Functions" category. He picked up a few new skills as well, such as the ability to fire beams of energy from the hole in his vessel's chest. However, what he seeked was under the "Secondary Functions" section of the document. But, just as he was about to get into it, he heard something.

The entity from before, X, as he now knew him, called David's name from the shadows far behind him. A shape stepped out suddenly, trudging towards him, with a twisted smile and cold stare on its face.

David could not afford to lose this. Not now, after everything he had been through. He couldn't best this thing in combat, as he had learned, but he needed to protect this crucial piece of information. And he had an idea.

David frantically slammed the keys of the board, not even taking time to look behind to see how close the threat was, because he didn't have the time for that. David copied the entire document, opened up the messaging program on the computer, inserted the entire document, selected every possible unit in the base to send it to, and, just as he felt the warmth of breath hitting the back of his neck, he hit send. A fist crashed through the core of David's vessel, but David felt triumph, not defeat, because he knew. This was all he needed.

After David to fell the ground, his systems failing, he looked on, waiting to deactivate once more. X stood in front of the screen, looking up at it. He raised his hand back, and thrust it forward, smashing the screen and fracturing it all over. David would have to try somewhere else, but he was confident he would find them.

Part 10: I See It All

Just like both times before, David awoke in another identical vessel, just as he suspected he would. He did not waste time. He blasted a beam from his chest, shattering the glass, before blasting off without hesitation. He now had a time limit, he had to find the computers littered throughout the facility and discover his vessels true capabilities before X did, or forever be stuck in this hellhole with no way of achieving victory. He could never bring justice to X for what he had done to him. For what he had done to her. That thought made David's heart burn brighter, and he flew even faster because of it.

David located another working computer within minutes. He turned it on and went to the computer's received messages, and there the document was, exactly as he had sent it. He skipped past all the things he had already seen and began to read. However, not long after he began, X appeared once more.

David quickly glanced at X before snapping his head back to the screen. He was able to read a piece before X destroyed him again. He now knew how to shoot out electricity from his body.

David woke again. He zoomed off once more and found another computer. X showed up again, but not before he learned how to push his vessel's limits for even more speed and power.

He woke again. Another computer. He learned how to cleave things with his vessel's sharp fingers.

Again. He learned he could rotate his limbs 360° around at extreme speed.

And again, and again, and again. He learned different ways to effectively use his vessel in a number of ways. However, the last one he found would be the most crucial by far.

David stood, looking up at the computer screen larger than himself. He read the last ability listed on the document, in a section all on its own labeled "Ultimate Function". David read more.

"You can't hide from me David."

David did not turn, ignoring X to focus on something of greater importance. He analyzed the words. "Biodata Copy". Promising words.

"This unit wields one, very special ability. That ability is to analyze the unique characteristics of any organism and perfectly replicate said characteristic, pushing itself past any possible limits if the organism scanned surpasses the unit in any way. It will reshape itself to perfectly match the power of anything it scans, creating the ultimate counter to any confrontation it may face."

Bingo. David had found the diamond he was searching for, and now it was time for it to shine.

Finale: See Me As I Am

David was armed with knowledge, the knowledge of what he was truly capable of. So he would take that fire scorching deep in his heart and burn the whole world down. David turned to X.

"You've been fun to toy with, David. Your rebellion was refreshing, but I'll crush your spirit like I did with all the rest."

"You don't get it, do you? You gave me everything I needed to tear you down. So come and face me, Goliath. Watch as I thrust your own blade into your heart."

David focused, muttered a prayer for strength, and looked X in the eyes. The vessel let out a thunderous roar as it adapted to this new, unfathomable power. The vessel automatically spoke.

"All lifeform data successfully copied."

X was confused, but he suddenly felt a chill, a presence on the same level as his own. He was no longer the sole one in control, and if he wanted dominion, he would have to fight for it.

David charged forward and struck X just as he had before, but the result was far different. X was launched back at at extreme speed, flying through the many walls like paper. David lunged after him, through the walls and out above the valley once again, beginning one great battle between a false god and a mechanical angel.

The battle went on for hours, but in the end, the rage of X could not match David's, not after everything he had been through. X was beaten, and while he still attempted to fight, his vessel and spirit were too weak to battle anymore. X was forced off the throne, and David took his place. X was shackled, his position of power revoked, and he was no longer the one in control.

David had won. He took the world, reshaping it and his own vessel into a body to better suit his rule. David however, unlike X, was human. He summoned the souls X once kept for his own amusement, including Elizabeth's spirit, and set them all free. It pained David to let go of Elizabeth, someone he cared so deeply for, but now, with all the power he wielded, he could not cling to her and drag her down with him.

Years pass. David was long since gone, he had mysteriously disappeared from his bed one day. Elizabeth could never get over the sudden loss David. She never found love again, holding onto the memory of him so very tightly.

One day, Elizabeth sat on her bed, looking where David once slept in remembrance. Suddenly, the TV cut on. The channel turned by itself. The Sega CD turned on, and the game inside it began on its own. A message appeared.

"Hey, Lizzy."

Red

what you think

7/10

It’s great!

What do you like and what could've been better?

Honestly I didn’t know what was going on since I’m not that much of a Sonic fan but it’s interesting!

I now know how my mech series lore looks to other bossfights users whenever I post concepts (no offense, it's just... WAY long)

This was originally gonna be short but I got carried away

Plot twist lizzy was pregnant

no dude did you read their backstory

u got time to read or nah?

Did David turn on the tv and messaged his wife?

yeah

Guess you can call this a mass rejection

also not wife just partners