Chapter 1

Pretty good. There's many punctuation errors tho

-_- screw the puncuation

Good punctuation makes the text more readable and easier to understand.
If I were to say "I like playing videogames writing books and fishing" you wouldn't understand what I mean. You might understand "Playing videogames writing books" which may make you think I play videogames about writing books.

I'm not trying to say that you're bad at writing, you're pretty good and I'm curious to the see the rest of the story, just that grammar needs some touch.

fair enough I'm just not good at adding it tbh

I was just a mechanical engineer a normal person trying to make a living but one day I got an idea of huge proportions that could change the face of human history but…only time would tell how long it will take

“it has been 3 years since the start of my project and I haven’t even begun being able to start on the mold the amount of materials and electronics needed is quite vast, I can’t see to sleep at night like something is following me I don’t know how long with will go for but I hope and pray for a miracle”

I was starting to get desperate as I was slowly losing my sanity and the figure I could see standing out side of the window just out of the corner of my eye wasn’t going away I went to doctors and psychiatrists worried for my health but I didn’t seem to have any symptoms of any schizophrenia or depression.

“Start log: after years of finally getting all of the necessary materials, molds, and electronics I finally have enough to begin on making the body I hope everything goes well because I haven’t bent getting sleep lately and the only problem with this project is the need for a human consciousness….”

I then began meticulously crafting planing molding and creating what I thought would change our history forever but that last part was going to be my downfall as even after a total of four years working on gathering the things needed and building the body I couldn’t finish that last mark so I got desperate and went to the hospital and secretly went to dying patients until one agreed to try this experimental treatment

“The treatment is still in the testing phases but if it works you could live again your life is fading away quickly and I can tell you don’t want to die but if you agree with me just once I can help you…”

I tried and tried but to no avail I had warned them that the success rate was relatively low due to me being the first to ever attempt this and when they heard it was only about a 25% chance they make they turned me down until a girl about the age of 12 who had suffered a horrible car accident and was barely holding on agreed to it