I need something to distract myself from my growing self hatred

It’s very good
95/🍞

69 because you are funny

Can you give me an actual score or was that your actual score?

Actual score

Felt a little short and the grammar was a bit weird, but the idea was really great!

98.

96

It was a little hard to follow and some of the plot points I couldn’t pick up on till reading the chapter a few times (but that is not your fault at all, just a bit of feedback)

81

73

i’d honestly give it a 70
my only gripe is that it was short, and i WANT MORE AAAAA

I’m sorry that it was short but I can’t stand writing another super long story like the Inkperial eras

it’s ok
i could barely stand writing dante’s inferno and that was on a much smaller scale

Wait is it done?

97/100

385.24589/255.3

/j

94/100

I kinda hated that Amber was just kinda used as a plot point to show off the trauma fuel instead of the cultists explaining how the Deceiver’s powers worked.

Pearl says it was for “character development”, but trauma isn’t the only type of character development.

Thank you for the feedback

Other than the Amber thing, it was great. Just a little hard for me to follow.

76

In my opinion
Because it was written by yous
10,000/100

Thanks!