https://docs.google.com/document/d/1IMmnf0b9jxHtKLKq4Op7jQNGCNFFq8jwjvL-l-Phcg4/edit?usp=sharing Here is the link, You can read it when you get the chance. any constructive criticism is appreciated :)
I saw it. It was good, but I was very confused. And make sure you have lots of description. thats bothered me alot in a different book I read. Make sure your reader can FEEL what you mean
[deleted] M
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What parts in specific confused you? (And thanks for the compliment)
As is, what are they even doing? The whole thing doesn't quite make sense. Seems more like a prologue that will fit in once you've read the whole story, not a first chapter. Unless you'll have something explain stufff
[deleted] M
2 ups, 4y,
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Ok, I'll add more details. I also plan on getting another explanation later in the story on what was going on, Though I may consider changing it into a prologue
