Ok. Here's the ACTUAL chapter one of The UNDERTALE book. Rate in comments.

bro I've been follwing this since the lore and wow 10/10

is there anything I could improve on

Actually your storytelling is better than mine
The reason why i don't reveal most of my AUs' lore bc of new ideas that just poped out in my brain and also editing on storytelling

so... nothing I could improve on?
its 10/10?

Yes 10/10

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btw about Wonder! Sans fanart you meant like this?

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HOLY SHIT THATS AMAZING
IM BOUTTA DIE

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