*clapping*

Chapter One
“Johnson Toy Co”

Standing In front of a door, Our Friend Benjamin quickly grabs his phone and records a video and says

“If you are seeing this message, then there’s a good chance I’m missing or I am alive..
I found it Johnson Toy Company is founded again maybe I can go inside and restore it so I can get it back making toys and stuffed animals or those robots at restaurants…Only one way to see..”

Ben opens the door to find everything clean like it was just done being built…

“Strange…it’s like it’s new…” Ben says before hearing a loud crash

“What was that!?”

Next thing Ben see’s is a tall person before being knocked out.

-1 hour later-

Ben opens his eyes seeing that he is tied up and on the ground and the first thing he does is trying to set him self free before the person comes back.

But it’s too late the person was in front of Ben

“Well well look who it is.” The person said..

Why is the person wherein a mask Ben thought right before the person took the mask off.

“Vanessa?!” Ben yells

“The one and only Benny” Vanessa says

-End of Chapter One-

do you take constructive criticism

Of course!

I made some modifications to the first part here and there to make it a little easier to read:

Standing In front of a door, Benjamin grabbed his phone and started recording, saying:

“If you're seeing this message, then there’s a good chance I’ve gone missing...
I found it; Johnson Toy Company. Maybe I can go inside and restore it so I can get it back making toys and stuffed animals or those robots at restaurants…Only one way to see..”

Ben opens the door to find everything clean like it was just done being built…

“Strange…it’s like new…” there was a loud crash nearby.

“What was that!?”

The last thing Ben saw was a tall figure before everything faded to black.

*clapping* Awesome!

but other than some small typos here and there, I have no complaints. very nice

Thanks here’s Chapter 2 in my next post but here is a teaser
Chapter 2
“Vanessa”

-11 years ago-

“Bye Benny…I’m gonna miss you” Vanessa says before going in a car….She was moving away to a different city

“By Vanny..” Ben says before seeing her leaving

“It’s Ok sweetheart maybe you’ll see her again one day” Ben’s Mom Says hugging Ben

looking forward to it!

It’s already done!

https://imgflip.com/i/89atqf Here’s the link for it