HELLO Yall

“GOOD MORNING HIGHWATER!” A cheery reporter called over the radio “its 7-o clock and this week is looking like any other week cloudy and rainy all weeks!” a police officer sighed, it’s been 3 months since the rain started, they said it was just a tropical storm… maybe it is “but this far in-land?” the officer thought “it couldn’t be…” but the rain hasn’t been the only thing that was odd. People were going missing dozens a month. But surprisingly the officer wasn’t as miserable as one would think. Work was going a lot faster, and more and more calls went in, giving this man something to do other than patrol the streets of the town. Suddenly the police radio crackled “all cars near sandalwood we have an unidentified body near the park” the man picked up the walkie “this is car 5A I’m on my way.”
About 5 minutes later the car pulled up. The man got out, another police car was parked near the tree a tall man turned to look at the other officer “Hey mike what do you think of this?” gesturing his note pad to the tree where a rotting corpse hung by a noose, “seems like a suicide.” “a little old don’t you think?” The other officer looks up into the tree the rope seemed to go up to the tree.
“The knot is pretty far up.” The tall man said, “let’s cut it,” mike said pulling out a pocketknife, he began to cut furiously sawing at the rope but not a dent was seen “weird.” Said the officer “what should we do ab-” he was cut off by a rope knotting around his neck, it tied itself then pulled the officer up into the tree. “EDWARD? EDWARD?!”
Just then another rope fell from the tree. And pulled Michael up.

My Name is grey lake I’m 22 and this is my story. It all started on the night of June 22nd, 2008.

omj direct characterization! my favorite! [i am lying]

But hey, it's pretty good given the expectations, environment, and other factors I care not to list. It's a bit emo, and that's expected from a horror/romance writer like yourself. Keep up the work!

<3

CHAPTER 1: Doney’s Dine N Dash
The familiar smell of Doney’s famous burgers seduced my senses, pulling me into the parking lot. I eventually walked in,
it was a slow day most of the employees were bored yet happy to see me, I sat down, and a middle-aged woman walked up, a small, forced smile on her lips “what can I get ’chu sugar?” she said in a heavy southern accent, “just a double Doney Burger and a coffee, three creams.” “got ’cha” she walked off soon after she left, she turned and walked right back. “you’ve got the air of a detective about ‘cha. Are you one?” she asked a bit fuller heartedly “I’m a paranormal investigator and a writer.” “Ah good” she leaned on the counter “are you heading for highwater?” “Yes.” She sighed “I figured; something isn’t right about that town.” “How so?” “People go missing almost every week. Two officers went missing yesterday.” I flipped out a notepad and quickly jotted down what the lady had just told me, “Alright thank you” a timer dinged “oh that’s your burger I’ll be right back…” she returned soon after,
“it’s on the house.” she said with a smile that felt sincere.
That’s got to be one of the best burgers I’ve ever had in the north.

CHAPTER 2: Missing on Sunstone
The cold fall rain pelted my windshield. The fog was blinding my view to 20 feet in front of me, I eventually saw the sign “WELCOME TO HIGHWATER!” It read” POPULATION:” the next number was two white blocks that read 89, a drastic change from the 234 people that lived here just a month ago.
I pulled into an intersection; it was a ghost town. A few people roamed anxiously through the streets. Some were obviously frightened to see me. The light turned green, and I pressed on the gas pedal ever so slightly no cops were around, so I knew they didn’t care.
I eventually made it to a house the address reading “13480 Sunstone Street.” I stepped out of the car the rain had subsided for now, but I knew it would start up again I quickly trotted to the doorstep and rang the bell. Almost instantly the door swung open. A teenager stood their headphones on their head and controller in hand “yes?” they asked somewhat annoyed “I’ll be there in a second!” a voice called from upstairs. Suddenly an older girl came down the stairs “you must be Grey!” I took off my coat “yes ma’am I’m here for Adrian Elbridge and you are?” “Oh, I’m Adrian but everyone calls me Amelia” “ah, my apologies miss.” They sat me in the living room, a game of Fortnite already in progress on the screen.
“Yes, um my father went missing two days ago… he was one of the police officers that went missing, Michael Elbridge?” a immediately knew why I thought I heard the name before “that’s why you sounded familiar.” She sighed “can we go somewhere to talk? Like a shop?” she asked. “Sure.” She looks at the boy “you have mtn dew in the fridge and chips in the pantry.” “Ok MOM” he said mockingly she rolled her eyes she then caught my suspicious look “ever since our mom died and dad went missing, I’ve had to take care of him.” She explained I nodded.

Please indent, it makes reading so much easier.
It's good! I am biased and hate 1st person, but that's the modern style &/or trend, what can I do? Interesting concept. Keep up the work!

sorry i pasted it from word thats where im working on it also thanks!

this is a WIP BTW

i think its good so far ^w^

<3

tbh i would pay good money to read the finished product

oh wow thank you...

P.S i did add a casual representation in there...

i love this story now :)

HEHE THX

yeee :D