Please give me some critique (both bio's in comments)

Name: Heiko Mitchiki ||Gender: Male || Age: 16 || Sexuality: Pansexual || Class: 1-A || Height: 5'7" || Body Type: Muscular || Date Of Birth: September 23 || Eye Color: Purple || Hair Color: Blue || Occupation: Hero In Training and Book Store Employee || Quirk: Deja-vu || Quirk Description: He can summon a memory and make you relive it, causing you to feel a certain emotion strongly. That will then make you temporarily paralyzed, and that's when he will hit you with all he's got. || Quirk Drawback: He gets a major headache or his head starts to bleed if he uses it to much. He can also feel the same emotion that his opponent is feeling just a smaller amount. ||Causal Outfit: He wears a pastel pink hoodie with loose black jeans that have both suspenders hanging of the sides. He also wears a spiked choker and a pentagram necklace. His outfit is paired with purple high top boots with black laces. He also painted his nails the same colors and order as the pansexual pride flag. || Hero Costume: He wears a sleeveless purple crop top with dark blue puffy knee length shorts. He also wears a black mask and a pair of black knee high boots with black laces. || Personality: He doesn't talk much, but if you are close to him he is very talkative. He doesn't like to cry in front of people because he feels weak and it didn't help him in the last so he doesn't see the point in crying now. He is super supportive of his friends because he doesn't want his friends to hate themselves as much as he hates himself. He doesn't like to talk about his past but Jirou, Bakugou, Shinso, Monoma, and Kendo all know about it because he wanted to only tell them. He is very flirtatious, but he easily blushes. || Likes: Reading, Drawing, Singing, and Dancing || Dislikes: Crying, Seeing one of his friends hurt, People taking advantage of other people, and Himself from time to time. || Backstory: When he was younger his parents died in a car crash, so he was sent to an orphanage. A few weeks later, he was adopted by Dabi. He didn't know at the time of the adoption that Dabi was a villain. The time he spent with Dabi was fun, he seemed to care a lot about Heiko. One day when he came back from school, Dabi and the League of Villains took him and held him hostage. They told him that if he didn't use his quirk on a big crowd of people they would kill him and all the friends he made at the school he was going to at the time. So, he used his quirk and paralyzed everyone. The entire League killed

everyone there, and Heiko was forced to watch. When they were done they let Heiko go, and he was put back into the orphanage. A few months later, he was adopted by a man named Taishiro Toyomitsu a.k.a. Fat Gum. At first when Heiko was leaving with Taishiro he would keep to himself because he was still blaming himself for the deaths of all those innocent civilians. But, Taishiro would help boost his confidence in anyway he could so eventually Heiko was very happy living with him. He helped Heiko train and get control of his quirk. And since he knew Heiko loves reading he let him get a job at a near by book store. To this day they still live happily together, but he is still hunted down by the League of Villains from time to time. || Friends: Baku Squad, Deku, Jirou, Momo, Todoroki, The Big Three, and Most Of Class 1-B || Best Friends: Jirou, Bakugou, Monoma, Shinso, and Kendo

Name: Yura Hachimi || Gender: Female || Age: 21 || Sexuality: Lesbian || Height: 6'1" || Body Type: Slim || Date Of Birth: October 3 || Eye Color: Left is purple; Right is blue || Hair Color: Green || Occupation: League Of Villains Member || Quirk: Personal Upgrade || Quirk Description: She can make any certain part of her body strong or better. || Quirk Drawback: If she uses it to much she could temporarily injure the part of her. || Causal/Villain Outfit: She wears a thin strapped red crop top with a short black pencil skirt. She has a blue choker one, as well as elbow high black fingerless gloves on. She has white and black knee high socks with red high tops. || Personality: She is very kind to her friends and the League, but anyone she doesn't know she treats very coldly. She is very talkative, and can keep up a conversation fo me a very long time. She is very protective of anyone in the League Of Villains because she doesn't like to see anyone that she cares about get hurt. She is very flirtatious and seductive, and she's considered a player. In fact, more people know her for being a player than a villain. Even though she has had many romantic encounters with ladies she has never had a real relationship due to the fact that she is know for being a player and no one trusts her. || Likes: Talking, Gymnastics, and Drawing || Dislikes: Hero's, Selfish People, and People Who Are Too Sensitive || Backstory: When she was a child her, her parents, and a bunch of other people were caught in a violent villain attack. The Pro's had rescued everyone, and had gotten to her family last. But, they got there to late and her parents got stuck under a giant piece of rubble. Yura tried to get help, but no one noticed her, but when a Pro did all they said was that there was nothing that they could do and that Yura should just give up. Her parents ended up dying because no one helped her, so she set out to have revenge on every selfish hero that would turn a blind eye to the helpless people. When she was older she got in touch with the League Of Villains and she was told to meet them a week later. So, when she met them all no one believes she was serious. She then used her quirk on the leader, Tomura and almost ended up killing him. But, Kurogiri stopped her before it actually happened. When she was calm, they obviously let her in. To this day, she is a proud member of the League Of Villains. || Friends: The League Of Villains || Best Friends: Dabi, Toga, and Tomura

Me: idk if u got the reply, but I said yes.
Julie: helo

Heiko: Hi
Yura: Hey...

Julie: whatcha doooing? I'm absolutely bored right now XD
Ashley: -comes over here- oh helo

Heiko: I'm drawing. *Holds up a drawing of a forest*
Yura: Nothing really, I'm just trying to keep an eye on him

Julie: cool. Ahh I see.
Ashley: -watching-

Heiko: *looks at Ashley* Hi
Yura: *nods in Ashley's direction*

Ashley; -smiles a bit-
Julie: wanna play Uno?

Heiko: *puts drawing away and smiles* Yeah
Yura: Sure

Julie; ok -sets up Uno- -gives everybody 7cards- -places a card from le stack to start-
Ashley: -puts down card-

Heiko: *puts down a +2 card*
Yura: *glares at Heiko and picks up 2 cards*

Julie: -skips Ashley-
Ashley: -glares at Julie for a second then waits-

Heiko: *puts down a card and smirks at Yura*
Yura: *rolls her eyes and puts down a card*

Julie: -puts down le wild card- the color is blue
Ashley: -puts down a blue +2-

Me: kool. If you don't mind me asking, what does the pansexual pride flag look like?

Like this

Me: ooooooooo pretty so Heiko is pan?

Me: Yep

Me: I is bi curious.

Me: cool, I'm bi and non binary

Me: so what is non binary?

Me: it's when one day I could wake up feeling like a female and another day I could wake up feeling like a male

Me: ahh I see, and bi is u like girls and bois?

Me: Yeah

Me: cool. I have become one with LBGTQ+ I think lol

Me: Nice lol

Me: indeed. (Replying to bottom comment) wanna role play?

Me: Sure, is it okay if I use both OC's or no?

Me: sure
Julie: oh helo